Somehow, I feel lost writing this essay. Questions that run through my brain at the moment are, "Aline lived in a different time period, therefore $8 is a lot for her because she is not so wealthy, therefore I can't really connect to her." Or something like, "I go tot he movies when I want, ride in cabs almost every weekend and listen to music on my own personal electronic device." When the question is asked to me, "Write a 500 word personal essay about yourself talking about how you are rich in some way like Aline." I think to myself that there is no relation to waking up with $8 and thinking that was so much money, but I can connect in some way that I am very rich for having family and friends.
As you may know, my brother was in a tragic accident three months ago. Throughout this process I immediatly realize that I needed my friends and family's support throughout this long process. From cards, cafeteria food and preyers we were blessed enough to find out that Ben was full steam ahead to recovery. The recovery time was supposed ti be long but Ben has been strong and I can't believe how fast he had recovered The connection to being rich for a day with this story might be a question popping in your head right now, but I feel very rich to have my brother here with us.
Change can happen in a snap of the fingers, a blink of an eye or whatever you like to day, but a miracle can also happen that quickly as well. I feel that I am the richest girl in the world and, since this happened, I can see a difference in my brother's and my relationship, and that's something I wouldn't change. Everyone is rich in some way and this is the way I am rich in.
A good piece of writing for the most part, save for a few odd simple errors once again. You do a good job of opening up the process of your thinking, and coming to a conclusion. A little more complex style with some more ideas incorporated would be the key improvement. Level 3+
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